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Descriptive Writing

At the moment in class we have been working on descriptive writing. We have been using pictures to give us ideas of what to write about. Here is a piece of writing I did.

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Bring Your Dinosaur To School Day

One day the teacher said it was bring your pet to school tomorrow so I brought my pet dinosaur.

First I had to clean my dinosaur’s teeth and then polish it’s claws.

SO after I had done that I had to try and fit him into the car.

But he couldn’t fit so I called Grandad to bring his truck and put Andy the dinosaur in the back.

Then we got to school and everyone saw him and then teachers seen him and they didn’t really like him.

Then I got sent to the office so the teachers told me to call my Grandad to pick up Andy so I called my Grandad and told him to pick up Andy.

    Then my Grandad picked Andy up and left I was sad and I knew Andy was to because I could hear him crying but roars “RoAr”.

                                                                                                                                          

Now I’m in big trouble for bringing a dinosaur to school.

So yeah that’s the end bye!!

Reducing Plastic Waste Poster

Infographic

Where To Next?  Connected, Level 4

Science/Social Science learning goals

We are learning to understand about the environments around us and the negative
of positive impact our actions can have on these environments.

Success criteria;

• identify some positive actions we can take at school and in our own lives to
• help our environment.

Literacy

Task: Create an infographic showing people how they can reduce
their waste in their lunchbox.   

Our co-constructed success criteria:

-Have a strong title/hook

-Use convincing language and images

-Have simple things people can do

-Use images (free to use)

-Use bullet points/ short sharp information

-Use correct punctuation and spelling.

The Cube Planet

Create and Describe Your Own Planet

- Description writing task

Term 2 Weeks 5-6

Purpose of this piece of writing is to:

Learning Intentions

I am learning to use language features to make
my writing interesting and engaging for the reader.

I am learning to use topic-specific vocabulary.

I am learning to include Te Reo Māori words in my writing.

I will be successful when I can show….

-I have used some language features to make my
writing interesting and engaging (simile, metaphor,
alliteration, onomatopoeia, rhyme)

-I have carefully chosen some topic
specific words to include in my writing.

-I have used some Te Reo Māori

Focus

We are continuing to look at descriptive writing. This week you are writing a
descriptive piece of writing to promote your imaginary planet.
You aim is to convince people to move to your planet.
You want your writing to allow the reader to be able to imagine what it is like on your planet.

First, we will look at an excerpt of a video describing the moon from the Avatar movie.
Click here to get to video= Pandora.

Second,
we will discuss together what you will need in your work to make it
successful and look at how to plan our work.
Then you will plan your work and check with a teacher before you start writing.

Third, do your piece of writing.

Fourth, complete you piece of writing.
Remember to proof-read (check spelling and punctuation) and edit (does it make sense?
do you need to change any sentences?)
yourself and with a buddy and fill in your self and peer-assessment. Check it with a teacher.

The Cube Planet is a planet tahi (one) cm away from the rā (sun)
it is red and it is about the size of a classroom.

People want to go to this planet because it is a new type of planet.
The Cube Planet is in our solar system, nothing lives there.

People want to go there but they know they can’t because
if you went there you would melt.
People are interested because it is a cube planet.

The cube planet is very blocky.
The Cube planet is a rock and it is burning hot with gas all over it and fire pits.  

YOU CAN’T GET THERE or you would melt like I said at the start but aliens can.

By Callan  

Rocky Shore Learning Goals

Here are our learning intentions for the rocky shore unit we did this term. I have highlighted green the goals I think I met.

Rocky Shore Recount

Learning Intentions for Science We are learning to understand that all living creatures have a life cycle. We are learning that living creatures have bodies that are designed to help them to live and survive.   We are learning that all living things are designed to live in a particular environment. We are learning to understand how food webs work. We are learning that in an ecosystem all living things and their environment are interconnected. We are learning to understand about the Rocky Shore and the impact, both positive and negative, we can have on this environment.

Literacy As part of our rocky shore unit we will also use our literacy skills to read and learn about the rocky shore and to write an information report on a rocky shore creature. Writing We are learning to write an information report about an animal. We are learning to use our writing skills across the curriculum.

Quick Writes 2017

We have been working on Quick Writes. This is where you are given something to write about (a writing prompt) and you only have 10 minutes to write as much as possible using this writing prompt. For our writing prompts we will use either images or short videos.

1: Tomato pulp

Tomato Fight For Fun

As I ran around the Mediterranean village of Bunol I saw people having a tomato lucha-(fight) and some people had goggles.

The smell of tomato was very asqueroso-disgusting because the smell of tomato is not very pleasant.

I heard people laughing and having lots and lots of fun they were also screaming.

I felt tomato in inbeteewn my dedos de los pies-toes it felt yucky and gross.

The End

2: A Stormy Day

Stormy Days

Once on a stormy night I woke up with a clash of thunder and a flash of lightning. I shivered with coldness from the crazy wild wind that moaned outside my window. There was lots of pouring and pounding rain. I thought someone was whistling at my door but it was the wind.

3: Spider Man

Is it a man, is it my mum, is it a poo? No! Its spider man. I am spider man  and there's confetti all around me and I was in New York. I could smell the smoke from the confetti cannons oh, and the sweet sweet smell of the kai-food.

The Bee Keeper

Quick Write Number One - The Beekeeper

For the next two weeks we are going to work on ‘Quick Writes.’  This is where you are given something to write about (a writing prompt) and you only have 10mins to write as much as possible using this writing prompt.

For our writing prompts we will use either images or short videos.

The purpose of this is to practise writing fluently.

When we look at our writing prompt we will have about 10-15 mins to discuss it and brainstorm some ideas and vocabulary.   

Our learning goals are to:

-write a description, using powerful words and phrases

-include some Te Reo Māori

-carefully check that our sentences make sense and have correct punctuation and spelling.

When we are writing we need to think about…

1. What do I want my reader to see?

2) What do I want my reader to hear?

3) What do I want my reader to smell?

Tips:

-look closely at the picture or video

-think about the three key questions and the learning goals

-give yourself time to plan and write

Do your writing here

The Bee Man

The person that gets honey from the bees is the BEE MAN. The bee man gets sweet, sugary,  and strong yellow honey to put on his toast in the morning. In the warm spring day listening to the buzzing bees.

Robot Rampage Work

This term we have been learning to write a narrative piece of writing. Here is my story about Toiletbot 2000.  

Persuasive Writing - Why we should have pets

We have been having a go at writing a piece of persuasive writing. Here is my piece of writing about why it's a good idea to have pets 

Title A Short Statement about the topic. eg. ‘Rugby League Is A Great Sport’	Pets Are Good
Overview/ Statement of position A brief statement of your view about the topic.  What you believe or want to argue.
Series of Arguments Reasons Your points supporting your view about the topic.  Your k arguments to support your statement and information to support these arguments. Remember -argument -supporting detail, reasons, examples	Firstly, pets are good animals because they can help disabled people with walking across the road. Blind people have a lot more independence if they have a  dog to help them. Dogs  are now being trained to be able to sniff out cancer genes in people.
	Secondly, dogs help people kill animals and to find dead wild animals, so the hunters find it easier to find what they have killed. At the airport the sniffer dogs sniff out drugs and guns. Thirdly, There are pets that provide food like cows, chickens, pigs and other animals. The food and drinks are milk, bacon, eggs, meat, beef and pork chops.
	Fourthly farm dogs help round up farm animals like cows and sheep. They are good at getting livestock from steep hills.
	Finally, pets are good with comforting people if they’re alone (tahanga). When people are alone they can get depressed and need medication which costs a lot of money.
Concluding statement Summing it up.  A summary of your arguments and your view on the topic.	In conclusion  pets are super duper good to have around and in your life. Pets can help you, find you when you’re lost and last but not least they love you. EVERYBODY NEEDS LOVE The End

Persuasive Writing - Why we should fix our field

We have been having a go at writing a piece of persuasive writing. Here is my piece of writing about why we should fix our field. 

Title A Short Statement about the topic. eg. ‘Rugby League Is A Great Sport’	Fix Our Field
Overview/ Statement of position A brief statement of your view about the topic.  What you believe or want to argue.	I strongly believe we should fix the school field. We need to fix the field because it is wet most of the time so we can’t go on it and we need to do important sports training and special events.
Series of Arguments Reasons Your points supporting your view about the topic.  Your arguments to support your statement and information to support these arguments. Remember -argument -supporting detail, reasons, examples	Firstly, the Board of trustees and Mrs Truman should fix the field because everyone is crowded kids need to play, run, train and Another issue is people need to train for tournaments, events.
	Secondly, sometimes when a ball goes over the fence it takes ages to get it back.
	Thirdly, kids can get hurt really bad because it's crowded with lots of students around. Because people get in the way of other people's games then
	Finally, it’s a waste> (moumou) of money because there's equipment the school does not use the field because the it's off limits.
Concluding statement Summing it up.  A summary of your arguments and your view on the topic.	In conclusion we need to fix our field because we don’t have enough room to play in, we need the field for sport> (hākinakina) training special events