The Guardian Of The Blaketown Beach

The Guardian Of The
Blaketown Beach

The guardian of the Blaketown Beach brings all the dead bodies that haven’t been found in to
his cave and he messily eats them for protein. He also causes the rips in the grey sea and he
drags the bodies into the ocean roughly. One of the days he furiously dragged a body and it was
a crash test dummy and the big taniwha got really mad. His green skin turned red and he was
furious so he harshly attacked some big boats to get some people's bodies because he was
very hungry.

If you think he could just eat fish there is something called a food chain. He slowly crawled along
the wet stones and the hard driftwood then he walked around Blaketown at night and there
were people partying at a big house. He went there and he camouflaged into the very dark
night so no one could see him outside. He stalked them for ages for the right moment to attack
the teenagers.

Then the moment came.  He went to attack and he dragged the bodies into the grey ocean and
ate all of them. The Taniwha has never been found by a human. The popo tried finding who or
what
killed the people at the crazy party.

The green taniwha was so happy that he had some meaty food but then he got hungry a year
later and so went back for more people. He went to the local rugby game, beat up everyone for
food and took them back to his very dark cave.

Ten years later he was hungry for some more people. So he went to eat some more people to
eat. Surprisingly there was a fake party at the same house but little did the taniwha know the
Police had set up a net trap to catch the taniwha.

When the green  taniwha furiously walked into the house to kill some people, he walked into
the house and got trapped. The cops got an alert to go to the house that the party was at 10
years ago and they arrived at the house and caught the taniwha. Then the taniwha went to jail
and ate all the inmates and then he went to Christchurch Men’s Prison. Then no surprise he ate
all the inmates there to and then he got ship to The United States Penitentiary, Administrative
Maximum Facility then he ate all the inmates there to. Then he went back to Blaketown and
went to his cave and slowly died from eating to much people.

The End

My Taniwha - Writing

For the past few weeks we have been practising using descriptive language in our writing. We have been trying to 'paint pictures with words.' We all got to invent our own Taniwha. We all drew our own taniwha and then we had to write about it and describe what it looks like, what we do with our taniwha and what our taniwha is like. Then we read our work to a buddy and they had had a go at drawing our taniwha.  

Create and Describe Your Own Creature

(Nogard-taniwha)

WALT: be descriptive in our writing.  

Look at the description of a Nogard.  Now Create and describe your own creature that you will then be able to read to a buddy so that they can draw it.  Your description must be as detailed and clear as possible so that when you share it with others they will be able to visualise and draw you creature. Use lots of adjectives (describing words - big, small, round, green).

You must .....

• Have a name for your creature
• Start from the big things and work your way to the smaller things
• Describe the shapes
• Describe its neck, body, tail, wings etc.
• What does its head look like?Think about its eyes, nose, eyebrows, mouth, teeth
• Describe its legs/flippers/fins etc.
• What colours is it?
• Any extra details on the body like scales, spikes etc.
• Keep it simple and clear!
• Use correct punctuation and spelling.
• Check that your sentences make sense.

Remember that a good writer ‘paints’ pictures in their reader’s head with words.   This is what good descriptive writing does.  

Create your piece of writing here Callan

  

Mr Taniwha   By Callan

My Taniwha’s head is shaped like a mountain with a cave. It has long spikes connected to the mouth like thorns in a prickle bush. Its tongue is longer than a mosasurase. It has koru patterns all over its body with 4 blood leaking teeth and a cracked tooth. It has points on the back of its head. He is bigger than the tallest person in the world. He is a  bodiless Taniwha . Mr Taniwha is mean, nice, and cool. Me and Mr taniwha go to the rā and the ISS (International Space Station). Then we go to the core of the Papatūānuku to get a lava drink.

                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                         

Peer Evaluation   Name of Peer:

What I think you did well:  

What I think you could improve on:

Self Evaluation

What I think I did well: I think I did well at explaining where my taniwha and I go.

What I could improve on:  Not missing out words and making it make sense.