Thursday, 14 June 2018

The Cube Planet

Create and Describe Your Own Planet
- Description writing task

Term 2 Weeks 5-6


Purpose of this piece of writing is to:


Learning Intentions
I am learning to use language features to make
my writing interesting and engaging for the reader.
I am learning to use topic-specific vocabulary.
I am learning to include Te Reo Māori words in my writing.


I will be successful when I can show….
-I have used some language features to make my
writing interesting and engaging (simile, metaphor,
alliteration, onomatopoeia, rhyme)
-I have carefully chosen some topic
specific words to include in my writing.
-I have used some Te Reo Māori


Focus


We are continuing to look at descriptive writing. This week you are writing a
descriptive piece of writing to promote your imaginary planet.
You aim is to convince people to move to your planet.
You want your writing to allow the reader to be able to imagine what it is like on your planet.


First, we will look at an excerpt of a video describing the moon from the Avatar movie.
Click here to get to video= Pandora.


Second,
we will discuss together what you will need in your work to make it
successful and look at how to plan our work.
Then you will plan your work and check with a teacher before you start writing.


Third, do your piece of writing.

Fourth, complete you piece of writing.
Remember to proof-read (check spelling and punctuation) and edit (does it make sense?
do you need to change any sentences?)
yourself and with a buddy and fill in your self and peer-assessment. Check it with a teacher.





Rendered Image
The Cube Planet is a planet tahi (one) cm away from the rā (sun)
it is red and it is about the size of a classroom.
People want to go to this planet because it is a new type of planet.
The Cube Planet is in our solar system, nothing lives there.

People want to go there but they know they can’t because
if you went there you would melt.
People are interested because it is a cube planet.
The cube planet is very blocky.
The Cube planet is a rock and it is burning hot with gas all over it and fire pits.  


YOU CAN’T GET THERE or you would melt like I said at the start but aliens can.



By Callan  


1 comment:

  1. Hi Callan. I like the idea of a cube shaped planet. It must be a very hot planet being so close to the sun. I couldn't begin to imagine what the aliens that can go there look like.

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